Homework

Homework

Junior Honors English: The Great Gatsby: read novel, writing marginal notes analyzing Fitzgerald's message/critiqe of the "American Dream"

Senior College Prep English: Raisin in the Sun essay due Tuesday, March 29th.

Wednesday, September 29, 2010

Vocabulary Words: Lesson Two

Write logoical, creative and grammatically correct sentences using the following words. There will be some lesson one words listed. Come on, you guys didn't think those words were going to disappear did you? You may talk to each other via blog, but comments will only be approved if they contain a vocabulary word from either lesson 1 or 2.

1. impotent, antithesis, gloat, impediment, bestial
2. perspicacity, nihilism, emandation, factious
3. aegis, maelstrom, chagrin, gloat
4. erotic, diaphanous, ephemeral
5. shard, bauble, altrusim
6. effete, enervate, fervent, rectify
7. bland, ignoble, boor
8. emendation, antithesis, labryrinth
9. amorphous, opulent, emendation, chargrin
10. Write 1-3 sentences using all vocabulary words as possible.

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Unknown said...

1. The impotent child embodied he antithesis of the bestial old man, who constantly gloated about blowing up impediments.

Unknown said...

2. Her pespicacity led to a complete ihilism of the rules and the attemps to emandate her factious behavior never worked.

Kimberly Rotter said...

Ginny,
He=the
"blowing up impediment"= unclear meaning

Sentence is confusing.

Unknown said...

3. Th breaking down of his emotional aegis led to a maelstrom of chagrin, caused by th gloating bullies.

Kimberly Rotter said...

Ginny,
2. Nihilism is missed spell.

Anonymous said...

1. The twin brothers were antithesis of each other. One was quiet and impotent, while the other was stong and loved to gloat. This created a bestial rivalry between the two.

Anonymous said...

1. The bestial manager always gloats to his anthithesis, the impotent employee who has a speech impediment.

Anonymous said...

1. The bestial man gloated as he looked at the impotent man he was impeding from entering the store. These two men were antithesis of each other.

Kimberly Rotter said...

Ginny,

You misspelled the twice in your most recent sentence.

Ian,
Great job!

Unknown said...

I meant to type 'the' but I guess missed the 't'.
Blowing up impediments, like being powerful and explodng things...

Unknown said...

5. Showing his altruism, Bob bought his friend a bauble welcome home gift which broke into many shards of glass soon after buying it.

Stefi said...

2. The governor used his perspicacity to make an emendation on the nihilism that was causing a factious situation.

Sam said...

1. The impotent peasant, who saw many impediments to making enough money to support his family and could not gloat of a happy and lavish life, was the antithesis of the bestial king.

Van said...

1. The leader was the antithesis of his impotent brother, he was bestial with his demands and loved to gloat, which became an impediment when ordering his men.

meghan said...

All the bestial boy's gloating affected his antithesis impotent brother and was an impediment to his progression in life.

Stefi said...

1. The bestial monster is an antihesis of an impotent monster so he can get through impediments very easily and gloat about his success.

Anonymous said...

7. The man was very bland, so he decided he was going to become a boor to make himself seem more interesting, but all he did was become an ignoble person.

Unknown said...

Without the army behind him the single solider felt impotent, he felt the antithesis of safe when the opposing countries solders besieged him, but at the last second his own men came to the rescue and after winning the small battle they began to gloat about there achievements, before the celebration ended the other country attacked again and the solders had to make an impediment in a short amount of time to keep them out, but when the solders came out with another victory they took bestial delight in all the men they had killed.

Kimberly Rotter said...

Some improvements:

Showing his altruism, Bob bought his friend a bauble, A TYPE OF welcome home gift, which UNFORTUNATELY broke into many shards of glass after buying it.

The bestial man gloated as he looked at the impotent man WHO he was impeding from entering the store. These two men were antithesis of each other.

Anonymous said...

The factious editor took part in nihilism, so he didn't have the perspicacity to write the emendations for the book.

Unknown said...

My keyboard sometimes doesn't register when I hit a key, that's why it's all misspelled.

4. The flowly, diaphanous gown looked incredibly erotic when the wife showed it to her husband; this was only an ephemeral, though, because their pet dog promptly ate it.

Unknown said...

8. The doctor made an emendation about the labyrinth of cells in the nervous system which was the antithesis of what we had thought before the new discovery.

Anonymous said...

2. The perspicacity of the old government official allowed him to know that nihilism with the constituion was unacceptable. It was ok to make an emendation to it, but anything more would be factious.

Anonymous said...

9. The opulent prince became chargin once he thought a amorphous copy of a new painting was the emendation of what it should actually be.

Stefi said...

3. John wanted to gloat to his parents about his work however, his slow reading was acting as an aegis therefore, John felt a lot of chagrin and his emotions were like a maelstrom.

Sam said...

2. Serah, whose nihilism had led her to the factious action of breaking into her neighbor's house, had been sentenced to two years in jail by a judge who had the perspicacity to bestow this emendation against her terrible actions.

meghan said...

Jean with her perspicacity realized the emendations needed to fix the nihilism caused by all the factious people in the community.

Unknown said...

5. The kindly old woman displayed nothing but altruism when her grandson stepped on a glass shard from a shattered bauble.

Kimberly Rotter said...

IMPROVEMENTS:

The governor used his perspicacity to make an emendation on the nihilism that was causing a factious situation.
Vague sentence, explain what was causing diagreement and what was changed to improve it.

The leader was the antithesis of his impotent brother; he was bestial with his demands and loved to gloat, which became an impediment TO HIS POWER BECAUSE IT ANGERED HIS his men.

All the bestial boy's gloating affected his antithesis, his impotent brother,(HOW) and was an impediment to his progression in life.vague

Van said...

2. The girls perspicacity soon led to nihilism and her factious parents refused to believe that their daughter needed emendations to her behavior.

Stefi said...

3. John wanted to gloat to his parents about his work however, his slow reading was acting as an aegis therefore, John felt a lot of chagrin and his emotions were like a maelstrom.

Unknown said...

7.The ignoble boor yelled at his secretary for bringing him bland coffee.

Anonymous said...

He was blocking the the impotent man.

Anonymous said...

The surfer liked to gloat about surfring though a malestrom of waves, but he never felt such chargin after wiping out, beacuse he forgot his aegis.

Unknown said...

2. Nina used her perspicacity to cleverly nihilism the law, she was always quite factious and would start arguments about anything, but to make emendations to her wrong doings she did good deeds.

Stefi said...

4. The woman was only ephemeral to her new business job because she wore a very erotic and diaphanous outfit.

Anonymous said...

5. The altruistic man felt horrible when he knocked over a priceless bauble and it broke into many shards on the floor.

meghan said...

While the other team was gloating over their impressive win Walter felt so much chagrin his emotions were like a maelstrom and he didn’t know how to aegis himself from the pain.

Anonymous said...

3. The celebrity had his bodyguards provide a aegis from the malestrom that was the media, who wanted to gloat over the chargin of his divorce.

Unknown said...

7. The boorish man did not care what people thought and even gave the queen his bland attitude which was very ignoble.

Unknown said...

6. The young soldier was so fervent to become part of the solution to rectify the war that he failed to pay attention when the sergeant told them they will be deployed to a barren, effete desert, and to drink plenty of water as to not enervate themselves.

Sam said...

3. Once the cafeteria broke out like a maelstrom, Alex had jumped under the aegis of a table as food flew across the room in both directions, his chargin restricitng him from gloating about his actions.

Stefi said...

5. Sarah's husband lacked altruism when he bought her a bauble that had shards of broken glass for Christmas.

Van said...

3. The womans mind was like a maelstrom, she thought that she had an aegis and would be unaffected when her rival began to gloat about her win, but the woman only felt chagrin with her defeat.

Anonymous said...

4. The erotic dancer's diaphanous clothing only last a ephemeral amount of time on her body before it was removed.

Anonymous said...

Oops, I've been forgetting to number my sentences. They've been in order so far.

4. Monique, the erotic dancer wore a diaphanous outfit for the show, which only turned out to be an ephemeral skit.

Kimberly Rotter said...

Class,

Do not be afraid of using semicolons, commas, dashes, and hyphens in sentence structure to add on clauses. These clauses can add much needed information to make your sentences clearer and more interesting.

For examples:
The bestial monster is an antihesis of an impotent monster so he can get through impediments very easily and gloat about his success.

What is this saying? Nothing really. Why is the one monster bestial and the other important? What is its impediments?

How about,

The bestial monster, who gloats about many successes of ravaging kingdoms and murdering children, is the antithesis of his younger brother, who is weak, impotent, and unable to overcome any impediments.

Unknown said...

7. After fighting in Vietnam, the veteran retreatd to his house for good. All the ignoble things he did at war had turned him into a boor; a bland, racist old man who detested everyone.

Unknown said...

3. Marks emotions were like a maelstrom, so he tried to aegis himself from other people so they wouldn’t be able to hurt him, after all he had been through in his life he felt such chagrin, but after making many friends and becoming popular his self esteem was restored and he would gloat about his happiness.

Stefi said...

6. Mike had a very fervent competitor so he needed to rectify the situation by enervating him and making him effete.

Anonymous said...

I never know where to use semicolons, commas, dashes, and hyphens in sentences. I just copied and pasted your sentence so the commas would be right...

Anonymous said...

I never know where to use semicolons, commas, dashes, and hyphens in sentences. I just copied and pasted your sentence so the commas would be right...

Anonymous said...

4. The teen couple, whose realtionship was diapanous, was ephermal, ending after a couple days and never leading to anything erotic.

Unknown said...

8. The antithesis gentleman were constantly at each others necks with varying opinions. There was one thing, however, that that wasn't up for emendation between the two: they would never get out of the labyrinth of a corn maze if they kept up with their bickering.

Anonymous said...

6. The fervent attempts to rectify the school that was desptroyed in ther hurricane in time for school to start, were weakened by the many storms that hit the town after then one that destroyed the school first time. And sfter the third one everyone was too effeted to keep trying.

Stefi said...

7. The waitress was a bland boor who was ignoble to the company therefore, she did not receive good tips.

Sam said...

4. The erotic man's ephemeral experiance with a beautiful woman wearing a diaphanous gown ended when the woman revealed that she was married.

Anonymous said...

5. Laurie showed no altrusim for Carrie beacuse she purposely stepped on the shards of glass from Carrie's employee of the month award, instead of helping her clean the mess up.

Van said...

5. The womans coworkers showed great altrusim by helping her when they found out that the little glass bauble her daughter had given her fell to the ground, breaking it into small shards and impossible to fix.

Kimberly Rotter said...

Emily:
How about this for an opening:

When the enemy solders besieged Brian’s ditch, he was alone and felt impotent, the antithesis of previous feelings of security when he was at the barracks with his own army…. The rest of your sentence was a run on. See if you can fix it.

Unknown said...

6. The fervent man could not rectify his reasons for trying to enervate his already effete mother by making her clean up after him.

Anonymous said...

8. The mase was a labyrinth of differnt ways to walk, but there was a emendation way out, the antithesis of what most people thought.

Unknown said...

4. The women in the diaphanous gown had once had an ephemeral job as an erotic dancer.

Sam said...

5. The woman thought that she had shwon great altruism in giving the bauble to her brother, which broke within half an hour of being in the male's possesion.

Unknown said...

9. Much to the secretary's chagrin, the opulent boss loudly emendated her for her amorphous mumbling while on the phone.

Stefi said...

8. It was a labyrinth in order to get to the lunch line. The children wanted the antithesis of this predicament therefore; they felt like there needed to be an emendation.

Unknown said...

For number 10, is it all the words in just lesson one or both lessons?

Anonymous said...

5.The pastor, who had alot of altruism, bought a expensive oranmament for the tree in his church, only to be crushed when half of it was broken into shards, making it mostly a bauble.

Anonymous said...

6. The effete, but fervent boy enervated his best friend in a game of tag, so he tried to rectify his actions so they could be friends again.

Kimberly Rotter said...

The antithesis gentleman antithesis how? were constantly at each others necks (try to avoid cliché) with varying opinions. There was one thing, however, that that wasn't up for emendation between the two: they would never get out of the labyrinth of a corn maze (this detail should be in opening of sentence to set up where men are) if they kept up with their bickering.
September 29, 2010 7:30 AM

6. The fervent attempts to rectify the school that was desptroyed (Mispelled) in ther (Mispelled) hurricane in time for school to start, were weakened by the many storms that hit the town after then one that destroyed the school first time. And sfter (Mispelled) the third one everyone was too effete to keep trying.

Kate move around information. A descriptive phrase should go after the phrase it modifie. Very confusing sentence. Fix. Adds commas and periods and more detail.

meghan said...

When Josh was injured by a large shard of glass he had to go to the hospital. Jeremy’s altruism showed when he visited Josh and brought a little bauble to make him feel better.

Kimberly Rotter said...

Ginny and class,

For number 10, it is just for lesson 2.

meghan said...

I am sorry i forgot the number again. That one was 5.

Anonymous said...

2. Our founding fathers, who were very perspicationish, came up with laws that are still emendation today. thiswas because they realised that a country could not be formed by nihilism, this decision caused some factious for some people.

Anonymous said...

7. Many thought he was just bland, but others knew the strange man as an ignoble boor.

Stefi said...

9. To say that Chris had a lot of money was amorphous. Chris was very opulent. However, when Chris' parents lost most of their money, Chris felt a lot of chagrin and felt that there needed an emendation to occur immediately.

Anonymous said...

meghan, josh and jermey. lol

Sam said...

6. The seemingly fervent husband had felt quite effete after hours of being under the hot and enervating sun trying to rectify his actions of breaking the lawnmower by flippping it over and trying to fix it, a one-hour job taking much longer then it should have for this male with little knowledge of tools.

Kimberly Rotter said...

Anne,
More details needed to make sense of sentence.

The effete, but fervent, boy enervated (HOW DID HE DO THIS) his best friend in a game of tag, so he tried to rectify his actions (HOW), so they could be friends again.

Anonymous said...

2. Our founding fathers, who were very perspicationish, came up with laws that are still emendation today. thiswas because they realised that a country could not be formed by nihilism, this decision caused some factious for some people.

meghan said...

To rectify their reputation, the soccer team was fervent to enervate the already effete team they were up against.

Anonymous said...

8. The boy followed the antithesis path in the labyrinth, therefore, he had to make many emendations to get to the other side.

Anonymous said...

6. The effete homeless man was only enervated more when he found no food during the day, only till later when he met a young man the was fervent to rectify the old man's poor situation

meghan said...

Sorry again that one was 6. My bad.

Sam said...

7. The son was sick of his boorish and bland father, whose ignoble actions against him caused the son to hate him.

Unknown said...

4. The erotic dancers' preformace only experienced ephemeral due to the fact that in the middle of her preformace her diaphanous outfit got caught on stage.

Van said...

8. The irritated man held a book full of emendations and scribbles, searching his way through the labyrinth of a library, he wanted to find the same book but one that was in antithesis condition of the one in his hands.

Unknown said...

Okay. Thanks. Do you wand me to re write it?
5. Jonah got his wife some type of bauble for Christmas that she loved, for Christmas dinner they had the family over and the kids were running around and ran into the precious gift that hit the ground with a shadier and the shards of glass went everywhere. A small piece went into little bills arm and the wife whose gift it was with all her altruism ran over to the child to make sure he was okay.

Kimberly Rotter said...

Stefi,

Lack of detail cripple meaning of sentences.

Fix:
To say that Chris had a lot of money was amorphous (HOW? UNCLEAR MEANING). Chris was very opulent. However, when Chris' parents lost most of their money (HOW), Chris felt a lot of chagrin and felt that there needed an emendation to occur immediately.

Unknown said...

5.Unable to remove the shard of glass from her foot, the young woman cursed the altrusic man who gave her the bauble for graduation.

Anonymous said...

6. The fervent attempts to rectify the school, that was destroyed in the hurricane, in time for school to start, were weakened by the many storms that hit the town after the one that destroyed the school first time. After the many attempts to rebulid everyone was too effete to try again.

meghan said...

7.The ignoble boor was quick to point out the blandness of the dish his wife spent hours making.

Sam said...

8. The exterminator, the antithesis of a game designer, had tried to make an emendation on the game designer's labyrinth.

Anonymous said...

9. The man wasn't very opulent, and had never felt such a chagrin in his life when he started to see amorphous figures all around him, therefore, he knew he had to make some emendations.

meghan said...

8.The emendation to the labyrinth was actually the antithesis to the first version.

Anonymous said...

7.The Japanese man was considered ignoble after moving to the United States to become a boor American with a bland everyday job.

Stefi said...

10. For Lisa's birthday, Frank got her a diaphanous, effete, and bland gown that had shards of diamonds poking through that Lisa could not gloat about to her family and friends. Lisa felt a lot of chagrin and her emotions were like a maelstrom which caused her to become bestial and an antihesis of herself. She felt that the gift was impotent and a nihilism against their marraige and an emendation needed to be made as soon as possible.

Unknown said...

10. Jane felt nothing but chagrin when her classmate, Mary, rudely emendated her about her bland, effete theory of the book.
"The labyrinth the author talks about," Mary gloated, "is the antithesis of what your impotent mind thought. It actually repesents a bestial maelstrom the man character feels about life, and if even a fragment of your brain could get around the diaphanous idea that it doesn't repesent a deeper meaning, and that it's simply a bauble to the story, you need to stop being so nihilistic of symbolism in stories." This made Jane cry and build an enormous impediment around her desk so she didn't even have to look at Mary.

Anonymous said...

3. The knights with aegis' looked gloatingly at the other kingdom when the maelstrom strom came and pushedthem over. They were left feeling with a feeling of a a complete loss of chargin.

Kimberly Rotter said...

Sam said...
Sam,

Nice. I am seeing development. Here is how I would edit it.

6. The seemingly fervent husband had felt quite effete after hours under the hot and enervating sun trying to rectify his previous actions of breaking the lawnmower, a process that lasted an hour due to his limited knowledge of tools.

Unknown said...

1. The man gloated about his life and he thought he was better then everyone else, when in reality everyone viewed him as the antithesis; impotent and annoying which made the man put up an impediment to the bestial people.

Amelia said...

The opulent young man was always gloating of his erotic activities down at the club.

Unknown said...

1.The impotent boy was the antithesis of his older brother. The boy could never seem to gloat over a win because he considered his brother an impediment, who was very critical and bestial to his younger brother. He told his brother he did not deserve or earn the win. This made his brother show a look of chagrin.

george said...

1.the body builder gloated at his arm while making fun of the smaller ,impotent arm of a child.

Unknown said...

Rebecca had a lot of altruism, but once I received my bauble from her, I threw it to the ground and it shattered into shards of glass.

Amelia said...

7 The food was rather bland, but it was ignoble of the boorish man to make such rude comments about it to the host.

Unknown said...

1. The football team gloated over their first bestial win of the season against the impotent team, who was antithesis to them.

Anonymous said...

Shards O' Glass freeze pops.

Unknown said...

1. The impotent man faced his adversary with chagrin; the large, impedimantary wall blocking him from his weapon.

Kimberly Rotter said...

Brooke,

I like the attempt at using commas and semicolons. We can improve sentence logics.
The man gloated about his life because he thought he was better than everyone else, when in reality everyone viewed him as the antithesis, impotent and annoying. which made the man put up an impediment to the bestial people.(How ate they bestial when he is the braggart? Need more sentence detail to fix logic).

Iago said...

1. The seemingly impotent woman gloated about the impediment that was created from her pregnancy, causing her husband's bestial manner and hatred which was the antithesis of what she felt towards him.

Zack said...

1. The impotent mailman was the antithesis of the senator, who lived across the street with a impediment around his large estate, that had a bestial delight in gloating about his job.

Amelia said...

The woman looked quite erotic in her diaphanous outfit but the moment was ephemeral after she pulled on a heavy coat.

Grace said...

1. The small, dark man was the antithesis of impotent; when it came right down to it he was quite the bestial man, one who gloated over the slightest thing and in such an intimidating, condescending way that he frightened off any impediments in his way.

Brittanee said...

7.)The ignoble boor did not have any friends because of his bland personality.

Unknown said...

The two teenage boys had very bad perpicacity, and everything they did was nihilism which was very factious in their town, so an emandation was much needed.

Maria said...

1) The antithesis of the impotent child was his bestial father, who, one day, came home gloating about how he caused a traffic impediment when he knocked over the traffic light.

Kimberly Rotter said...

Julia,
Logic of sentence is off. Need more detail to make some sense of it. Why would you or any person destroy a present from an altruistic, nice person?????

Rebecca had a lot of altruism, but once I received my bauble from her, I threw it to the ground (WHY) and it shattered into shards of glass.

Unknown said...

2. The boy's toy knight aegis soon vanished after his room was struck by a maelstrom. He was suppose to play knights in armor with his friends the next day, and he couldn't find his aegis that would lead him to win, so he developed a look of chagrin thinking he might lose the game. He spent the rest of the day cleaning his room and then he found his aegis which caused him to gloat with excitement.

Unknown said...

2. The factious old woman still had the perspicacity to make an emendation to her nihilism of health insurance.

Zack said...

7. Thw ignoble boor had bland manners towards other people.

george said...

2.criminals lack the perspicacity to understand that their factious beliefs in nihilism need an emendation.

Amelia said...

5 The womans bauble, a pretty necklace from her mother, was broken into many shards, but in an act of altruism her friend had it fixed, not worrying about the cost.

Kimberly Rotter said...

Brooke,

What does this mean??? Vague!

The two teenage boys had very bad perspicacity (WHY??? You should mention something they did that would anger town), and everything they did was nihilism which was very factious in their town, so an emandation was much needed.


Great Sentence Maria:

The antithesis of the impotent child was his bestial father, who, one day, came home gloating about how he caused a traffic impediment when he knocked over the traffic light.

Unknown said...

i just realized i messed up on my last sentence, sorry i didnt understand the definition of perspicacity.

Unknown said...

7. The shard of the bauble was not given out of altruism.

Unknown said...

1. The superhero gloats to the news media about how he defeated the existing antithesis villain, who is bestial and cased mischief towards impotent civilians in the town. He told the news reporters how no impediment could get in his way of saving the town.

kevin said...

1. The man sat at his desk feeling impotent when he looked down the hall and saw the antithesis of himself gloating about how he just got a new job but the only impediment was that they would have to fire the man at hs desk to make room for the younger,smarter bestial employee.

Unknown said...

5. To reward the altruism of town hero who died in the fire, they cut a shard of his fireman uniform jacket and added it to the trophy in the case which will serve as a bauble for everyone to remember him by.

Kimberly Rotter said...

George, Nice sentnce!
Just need to take out "AN".

Criminals lack the perspicacity to understand that their factious beliefs in nihilism need emendations.

Brittanee said...

1.)The bestial girl gloated about everything she had to an impotent girl that was the antithesis of her,putting an impediment on the conversation.

Unknown said...

I understand. But I threw it because it was a useless trinket.

Unknown said...

The government officials were being factious in regards to the emendations they were trying to make, resulting in loss of perspicacity among them, leading to total nihilism in the country.

Amelia said...

8 I made an emendation of the direction I was going in the labyrinth because the way I was currently headed was the antithesis of where I wanted to go.

Grace said...

Nihilism can often show a lack of perspicacity in the individuals who go about it. All they end up doing is being quite factious and having to make more emendations than is worth while.

Unknown said...

While Julia was trying to escape the complicated labyrinth, she made an antithesis turn to get out and she needed to emendate her mistake as quick as possible before she got to confused.

Maria said...

2) The factious man exhibited nihilism when the judge announced his sentence, using perspicacity and emendation.

Unknown said...

7. The new restaurants food was bland, but it was rather ignoble of the boorish woman to spit out her meal.

Unknown said...

6.The football player was not effete. He tried to enervate the others from the opposite team with his strength. He was very fervent because he wanted to win the game.

Unknown said...

4. The erotic dancer in the showy diaphanous outfit, caused the men to have ephemeral feelings for her that only lasted as she was doing her job.

Zack said...

Dave's erotic girlfriend saw the diaphanous shooting star, but it was only for an ephermal moment.

Unknown said...

3. The warrior always used to gloat about his glorious defeats, but one day he faced total chagrin when his aegis failed and ever since then his emotions were like a maelstrom.

Iago said...

2. Lily's perspicacity led her to realize that the factious boy shouldnt come in between her and her bestfriend and instead they should make an emendation to their nihilation of the "bestfried" rule book.

Amelia said...

The aegis was broken into shards and there was no way to rectify it.

Iago said...

2. Lily's perspicacity led her to realize that the factious boy shouldnt come in between her and her bestfriend and instead they should make an emendation to their nihilation of the "bestfried" rule book.

george said...

3. the sailor hid below the aegis that was the lower deck when the maelstrom hit the ship, causing him to be a chagrin to the captain.

Kimberly Rotter said...

Kevin

You have tons of information packed in here, so we need to reorganize it for more since. Because you have no names, don’t know what pronouns are referring back to. I started rewrite. Try to finish it yourself.

John, feeling impotent, sat at his desk, listening to his antithesis, Mike, explain the only impediment to his new job: they have to fire the man at hs desk to make room for the younger,smarter bestial employee.

kevin said...

2. The factious man had the perspicacity to emandation his nihilistic behavior

Brittanee said...

2.)The factious statement caused the man to make an emendation to what the other man that did not use his perspicacity said about nihilism.

Grace said...

3. Even through the maelstrom of comments, Joe was chagrin when he could no longer hide behind the aegis of his username while he was gloating about shoplifting.

Unknown said...

2.The girl had the perspicacity to argue for a higher grade when she knew she could obtain a higher grade. This test was factious because the essay question was very vague. She finally got the emendation she wanted.

Unknown said...

7. The ignoble man who was such a boor had an extremely bland taste and anything he tried he said was nauseating therefore he sent it back with the waiter for a refund.

Zack said...

This maze was an antithesis of a labyrinth, it was like walking in at straight line, it needed to be emended.

Maria said...

3)The usually gloating boy lost his aegis because of the maelstrom of his parents divorce, causing him to feel chagrin.

Unknown said...

4. The woman saw a diaphanous gown in Victoria's Secret and had an ephemeral thought of wearing it for an erotic night with her husband.

Kimberly Rotter said...

Cara,

Good start, but can be more succinct. See how I reworked your first two sentences, combing them.

The girl had the perspicacity to argue for a higher grade after she realized that the English test was factious due to an essay question that was vague. She finally got the emendation she wanted.

Brittanee said...

4.)The erotic dancer thought that the man really loved her but in reality he only liked her diaphanous outifts and his love for her was ephemeral.

Unknown said...

4. The woman saw a diaphanous gown in Victoria's Secret and had an ephemeral thought of wearing it for an erotic night with her husband.

Grace said...

The diaphanous dress was somewhat erotic and Layla experienced ephemeral shock when her mother let her wear it out.

Iago said...

3. My mother was a complete chagrin when it came to boys, one night her mind was in a complete maelstrom and she came inside while I was hanging out with my boyfriend and started gloating about how we don't have enough aegis when it comes to banking.

Unknown said...

During the whole game, John's mind was in a maelstrom because he was gloating about his perfect girlfriend, which made him forget that he was the aegis of his teams goal, and when the other team scored, John felt alot of chagrin because he let up the winning goal, and his team was dissapointed in him.

Unknown said...

During the whole game, John's mind was in a maelstrom because he was gloating about his perfect girlfriend, which made him forget that he was the aegis of his teams goal, and when the other team scored, John felt alot of chagrin because he let up the winning goal, and his team was dissapointed in him.

Amelia said...

The opulent young man was fervent to get on with the erotic activities but much to his chagrin the girls bauble had gotten caught in her diaphanous outfit because she didn't have the perspicacity not to wear jewelry and now there was no way to rectify the situation without ruining her dress,a situation he would not gloat about later, but in a rare act of altruism the man promised to purchase her a new one, such an offer was the anithesis of his normal attitude because despite his riches he was rather frugal, this moment of kindness was ephemeral however; as the next moment his maelstrom returned and his bestial demands for her to hurry up continued.

Kimberly Rotter said...

Grace,


Good, but using different conjunction will help sentence. See below:

Since the diaphanous dress was somewhat erotic, Layla experienced ephemeral shock when her mother let her wear it out.

george said...

4.the pimp's erotic evening with his girlfriend was ephemeral due to the fact he tore her diaphanous dress and she slapped him.

Grace said...

5. The left over shards of the bauble were a symbol for Brian's lingering altruism.

Unknown said...

8. The old map created of the confusing labyrinth maze was wrong and needed many emendations, because the old directions given were completely antithesis to what the correct route out was.

Brittanee said...

The boy thought he was under the aegis of his friends but when he began to gloat they left him leaving him in a maelstrom of problems ultimatley ending in him feeling chargrin.

Brittanee said...

The boy thought he was under the aegis of his friends but when he began to gloat they left him leaving him in a maelstrom of problems ultimatley ending in him feeling chargrin.

Unknown said...

I was fervent to rectify Rebecca’s tennis ability, but I actually enervated her and she was effete for her tennis match.

Zack said...

The effete old man was enervated by the strong heat that day, but he was fervant to get inside and rectify the air conditioner.

Unknown said...

I was fervent to rectify Rebecca’s tennis ability, but I actually enervated her and she was effete for her tennis match.

Unknown said...

The boss was a nice man who felt genuine altruism toward his eployees. For Christmas he ordered them each a small bauble as a gift; however, as he was unloading them, he mishandled the box they were packaged in and it crashed to the floor, sending the shards of his presents everywhere.

kevin said...

3. George used his car as an aegis because of the maelstorm of hail coming down but Zack tried to make it into the school when he was hit on the head and was chargin while George was gloating because he told Zack not to go outside.

Maria said...

4) Tom had a dream that his girlfriend arrived to his place of work wearing a very erotic, diaphanous dress; however, when he woke up from his ephemeral dream, he realized he still had four hours left in his shift.

Kimberly Rotter said...

Amelia,
Try to be succinct. I fixed beginning to make more sense. You try the rest, even if you need to do it in another sentence.

The opulent young man was fervent to continue his erotic activities, but, much to his chagrin, the girl, due to her lack of perspicacity, wore a bauble that got caught in her diaphanous outfit, and there was no way to rectify the situation without ruining her dress.

a situation he would not gloat about later, but in a rare act of altruism the man promised to purchase her a new one, such an offer was the anithesis of his normal attitude because despite his riches he was rather frugal, this moment of kindness was ephemeral however; as the next moment his maelstrom returned and his bestial demands for her to hurry up continued.

Iago said...

Ruby's night out was ephemeral when her father crashed the party and became peevish about her erotic outfit and the fact that it was way to short and diaphanous.

Amelia said...

*her chagrin , *she would not gloat

Unknown said...

The tornado seemed to be gloating as it tore through the house, while the family watched with chagrin from down the street, using a wide pipe drain as an aegis from the maelsrrom.

Unknown said...

5. The little girls altruism really showed when she offered to buy the family a new bauble after accidentally knocking it over causing shards of it to cover the floor.

Brittanee said...

6.)The effete actor's career was enervated when he was caught up in a scandal but he was very fervent about rectifing it again.

Unknown said...

On one side of the hill there needed to be an emendation to the labyrinth because there was no way of getting out. On the other side of the hill the other labyrinth was antithesis and had a way out.

george said...

5.the queen had a moment of altruism when she gave a shard of her bauble diamond to a peasant.

Unknown said...

7. The girl is bland and doesn’t talk much, but she has never once in her life caused her family to feel ignoble for having boorish actions.

Unknown said...

6. The farmers were fervent to rectify the effete, enervated fields.

kevin said...

4. The erotic dancer was ephemeral when the diaphanous dress ripped

Grace said...

6. Paul, in attempts to emotionally enervate the already effete boy, poured coke onto Tom's book. But his un-rectifiable action, to Paul's surprise, did not weaken Tom, but rather sent him into a fervent rage.

Brittanee said...

5.)Even though the man continued to buy her many bauble gifts she could not take him back because he didnt have a shard of altrusim for her.

Amelia said...

,but, in a rare act of altruism, the man promised to purchase her a new one, such an offer was the anithesis of his normal attitude, because, despite his riches, he was rather frugal...

Maria said...

5) Lily was an extremely altruistic girl, and brought a bauble, an artifact from ancient Greece, to “Show and Tell”; but she was heartbroken when she watched it fall and break into a million shards right before her eyes.

Kimberly Rotter said...

Kevin,

Don’t be afraid of using different conjunctions.

The erotic entertainer’s dance was ephemeral because her diaphanous dress ripped

Grace said...

7. Bland though he was, Kirk had no tolerance for ignoble boor's and made it very clear that they were not welcome.

Grace said...

8. Despite the fact that Gillian could not make emendations with her antithesis, Elliot, she followed him into the labyrinth that was the building’s basement.

Grace said...

9. Though chagrined by James' rejection, Quill could not think of any way to make effective emendations. So, with amorphous thoughts of James floating around the maelstrom in his mind, Quill went on with his opulent, yet unfulfilling life style.

Grace said...

Despite being blatantly impotent, Drew went on acting as bestial as possible, in hopes of making himself look intimidating. But when he realized that his tactics were only making him out to be a factious, ignoble, boor, he decided that he could no longer hide behind an aegis of brutality. So, chagrined he tried to make emendations with all of the effete people he had so cruely enervated in his perspicacity. Nihilism, he realized was not the way to get himself noticed, and so he became the antithesis of the brute he was before and began to show a great amount of altruism. Most said that his change would be ephemeral, and that in no time, he would once again begin to gloat about all of the harm he was doing to people who didn't stand a chance against him. They did not realize that he would no longer be an impediment on people's self confidence and that he was truely changed.

Kimberly Rotter said...

Grace,

Impressive. I would only make some comma and word changes as seen below.

Despite being blatantly impotent, Drew went on acting as bestial as possible in hopes of making himself look intimidating. But when he realized that his tactics were only creating a reputation as a factious, ignoble, boor for him, he decided that he could no longer hide behind an aegis of brutality. So, chagrined he tried to make emendations with all of the effete people he had so cruely enervated in his perspicacity. Nihilism, he realized, was not the way to get himself noticed, and so he became the antithesis of the brute he was before and began to show a great amount of altruism. Most said that his change would be ephemeral, and that in no time, he would once again begin to gloat about all of the harm he was doing to people who didn't stand a chance against him. They did not realize that he would no longer be an impediment on people's self confidence and that he was truely changed.

ERic Gladstone said...

the erotic boy would always gloat about all of the females he would get. despite his friends made fun of him for being the way he was.

Anonymous said...

The impotent boy was the antithesis of his very bestial brother who every time he beat him up gloated about it. So the boy had to create a impediment around his door so his brother couldn’t get in.

meghan said...

Jean’s perspicacity made her realize the emendations needed to edify the nihilism caused by all the factious people in her community.

Anonymous said...

The judge knew this man was very factious but did have the perspicacity to handle himself in a courtroom. He started out by saying that this new law was a nihilism and that there needed to be a emendation. After hearing this from the man she considered his argument and banishes the law.

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