Homework

Homework

Junior Honors English: The Great Gatsby: read novel, writing marginal notes analyzing Fitzgerald's message/critiqe of the "American Dream"

Senior College Prep English: Raisin in the Sun essay due Tuesday, March 29th.

Thursday, October 21, 2010

Vocabulary Lesson 5

It’s that time of the week again: time to write fascinating, thoughtful sentences using your vocabulary words. This week, I want you to work on using different types of conjunctions. Most of you only rely on “and” and “or,” limiting your ability to write compound, complex, and compound-complex sentences. In essence, you limit your ability to express logic in your sentences, preventing yourself from illustrating how your ideas are connected.

Instructions:

Access the following website and read about conjunctions: http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/conjunctions.htm

Write 5 sentences using a different vocabulary word and conjunction for each.

125 comments:

Anonymous said...

People love the Phillies, there for they are very ebullient when it comes to their games.

Anonymous said...

People have many different personalities and out looks on life, there for some people are sanguine, while others are sinicle.

Stefi said...

1. John was wearing a suit and tie therefore, we knew he was a fop.

2. Nick had a good feeling about his job interview so, he felt very sanguine that he was going to get the job.

3. Mike's mother told him that he better stop playing his music loud before he impairs his hearing.

4. Jen found herself in a quandary since she overslept for work.

5. Shane showed deference towards his girlfriend because he opened the door for her.

Anonymous said...

If something gets in to a person's eye in a chemistry lab the chemical can impair the person's seeing for the rest of their life, even if it was not their fault the accident happened.

Anonymous said...

Carols' vision was impaired after she spilled dangerous chemicals in her eyes because she forgot to wear her saftey goggles in chemistry class.

Anonymous said...

The girl did not like her fathers new girlfriend, but she had deference when it came time for there wedding.

Kimberly Rotter said...

Taylor,

People love the Phillies; therefore, they are very ebullient when it comes to their games.

Anonymous said...

Puzzles area quandry, especialy if the puzzle is missind many peices.

Unknown said...

1. My father cares alot about his appearence, therefore I called him a fop.

2. Because of Briana's sanguine personality, everyone ejoyed spending time with her.

3. Although the drunken man felt he could drive, the woman did not allow it because of his impaired judgement.

4. The suspects nebulous story did not line up, thus landing him time in jail.

5. Sadly I broke the mirror, therefore I now have an imprecation for 7 years.

Kimberly Rotter said...

Class,

When using subordinating conjunction like therefore, indeed, etc, us the following punctuation.

sentence; conjunction, subordinating sentence.

Kate, fix your sentence.

meghan said...

The fans gave panegyrics and flowers to the gold medalists resulting in a sanguine environment throughout the stadium.

Anonymous said...

Most ebullient sports fans are very excited fro mchampionship season, whereas people who don't like sports could probably care less who wins.

Anonymous said...

The young man was known as a fop because of his outrageously flamboyant wardrobe.

Kimberly Rotter said...

Class,

When using coordinating conjunctions like and, or, nor, etc. that join two sentences together, the comma comes before the conjunction.

sentences, conjunction sentence.

Unknown said...

Brian, the fop that he was, was always best dressed in high school though kids did occasionally make fun of him for it; however, he was never bothered by abuse of his classmates and was always sanguine.

Anonymous said...

People have many different personalities and out looks on life; therefore some people are sanguine, while others are sinicle.

Anonymous said...

The young couple thought there was a imprection on there new house, so they moved, rather then to live with it.

Kimberly Rotter said...

Stefi,
Edit the following for punctuation mistakes.



1. John was wearing a suit and tie therefore, we knew he was a fop.

2. Nick had a good feeling about his job interview so, he felt very sanguine that he was going to get the job.

meghan said...

The revisions included such bowdlerizing, thus impairing the novel.

Anonymous said...

Laura was very sanguine about winning the soccer game, even though their opponent is undefated.

Stefi said...

1. John was wearing a suit and tie, therefore we knew he was a fop.

2. Nick had a good feeling about his job interview, so he felt very sanguine that he was going to get the job.

Kimberly Rotter said...

Kate,

Commas can come before introductory prases that supply information.


If something gets in to a person's eye in a chemistry lab, the chemical can impair the person's seeing for the rest of their life, even if it was not their fault the accident happened.

Anonymous said...

1. Because the baseball player broke a neighbors window with a ball, he ended up in a quandary with the owner of the house.

2. The solder was strong and brave at war, so many people were panegyric to him upon his return.

3. Ted was a nice kid with a friendly personality, yet he had a major problem of being pedantic to others, resulting in Ted being avoided by all.

4. Joe was unfriendly an rude to most in his small town, as well as carnal to the young women who wanted nothing to do with him.

5. While the young mans family were mostly farmers and cattle ranchers, consequently the young man was very fop, and wanted to become a fashion designer.

Kimberly Rotter said...

Anna,

Great!

Carols' vision was impaired after she spilled dangerous chemicals in her eyes because she forgot to wear her saftey goggles in chemistry class.

Anonymous said...

It is hard to spend too much time around pedantic people, even if they don't mean to be that way.

Kimberly Rotter said...

Kate,

Unclear meaning. Fix.

Puzzles area quandry, especialy if the puzzle is missind many peices.

Unknown said...

The boxer impaired his opponent with a right hook to the face whereas, rather then gloating about his win Sam shuck the apposing boxers hand in deference.

Kimberly Rotter said...

Ryan,

Fix punctuation.

1. My father cares alot about his appearence, therefore I called him a fop.


4. The suspects nebulous story did not line up, thus landing him time in jail. (no comma)

5. Sadly I broke the mirror, therefore I now have an imprecation for 7 years.

meghan said...

Emily was in a quandary trying to decide what to have as a snack; but when she found a taco in her pocket, she became ebullient.

Van said...

1. The ebullient man was not upset when he tripped up the stairs, because he was far to focused on how his essay entry had one first place.

2. The woman was very sanguine about the idea of her sales products, until she saw that a larger buisness had stolen her idea.

Unknown said...

1.Stefi studied very hard for her chem test, therefore she was sanguine.

2.The professor never choose tom to answer a question, because tom was so pedantic.

3. The students came out of the classroom crying, because the teacher had just read an elegy.

Anonymous said...

Puzzles are a quandry, especialy if the puzzles are missing many peices.

Kimberly Rotter said...

Meghan,

Good.

The fans gave panegyrics and flowers to the gold medalists resulting in a sanguine environment throughout the stadium.

Kimberly Rotter said...

Katie,

Please fix. You have some spelling errors that hinder meaning.

Most ebullient sports fans are very excited fro mchampionship season, whereas people who don't like sports could probably care less who wins.

Kimberly Rotter said...

Anna,

Great!
The young man was known as a fop because of his outrageously flamboyant wardrobe.

Kimberly Rotter said...

Stefi,

Look at semicolon and comma usage. A semicolon goes before this subordinating conjunction and a comma after.

1. John was wearing a suit and tie; therefore, we knew he was a fop.

Kimberly Rotter said...

Emily,

Excellent!!!

Brian, the fop that he was, was always best dressed in high school though kids did occasionally make fun of him for it; however, he was never bothered by abuse of his classmates and was always sanguine.

Kimberly Rotter said...

Katie,

A comma is needed after the subordinating conjunction.

People have many different personalities and out looks on life; therefore, some people are sanguine, while others are sinicle.

Kimberly Rotter said...

Ian,

Great sentences!

This sentence needs some revisions. Unclear meaning.

5. While the young mans family were mostly farmers and cattle ranchers, consequently the young man was very fop, and wanted to become a fashion designer.

Kimberly Rotter said...

Emily,

Comma in a weird spot. Where else would you put it to improve sentence?

The boxer impaired his opponent with a right hook to the face whereas, rather then gloating about his win Sam shuck the apposing boxers hand in deference.

Kimberly Rotter said...

Meghan,

For COORDINATING conjunctions, a comma comes before the conjunction. A semicolon may come before a SUBORDINATING conjunction.

Emily was in a quandary trying to decide what to have as a snack, but when she found a taco in her pocket, she became ebullient.

Kimberly Rotter said...

Class,

Don't become too comma happy. Comma are usally in places where the reader would pause to take a breath.

Access the folloing site for help
http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/commas.htm

Kimberly Rotter said...

Steph and Jamie,

Read about comma usage and fix sentences.

Unknown said...

1. The ebullient crowd at the football game always pumped the players up, however if the opposing team was winning the crowd's sanguine attitude was impaired.

Amelia said...

The man was a fop, yet he dressed messily on mondays.

Kimberly Rotter said...

Samantha,

See other posts about semicolons and subordinating conjunctions and comma to edit.

1. The ebullient crowd at the football game always pumped the players up, however if the opposing team was winning the crowd's sanguine attitude was impaired.

Unknown said...

1. The ebullient crowd at the football game always pumped the players up; however, if the opposing team was winning, the crowd's sanguine attitude was impaired.

Amelia said...

Despite her belief in the mystic arts, Jenna's imprecation neither affected her brother nor her mother.

Amelia said...

Annie is generally sanguine, however, if you make her angry, she will pout all day.

Kimberly Rotter said...

Amelia,

Good sentences

The man was a fop, yet he dressed messily on mondays.

Despite her belief in the mystic arts, Jenna's imprecation neither affected her brother OR her mother.

Kimberly Rotter said...

Samantha,

Excellent edits!

1. The ebullient crowd at the football game always pumped the players up; however, if the opposing team was winning, the crowd's sanguine attitude was impaired.

Amelia said...

The teachers agreed not to bowdlerize the stories as long as they taught that the violent actions were innapropriate.

Unknown said...

Since the cheerleading team won their biggest competition, their coach gave panegyrics and trophies to the athletes for their hard work.

Kimberly Rotter said...

Amelia,

Read other posts about semicolons to edit sentence.

Annie is generally sanguine, however, if you make her angry, she will pout all day.

Unknown said...

The rakish young man, rather than marry the girl his parents chose for him to marry, ran off with the postman's daughter.

Because of the imprecation upon her, Sara was unable to tell a lie.

Bill was impaired in such a way that he could not walk.

Karen had a sanguine personality, therefore her job as a cashier didn't seem to bring her down as it did the other employees.

Due to the sensitive nature of the novel, the content was bowdlerized until there was hardly any left.

Amelia said...

Marcy was embullient to go camping even though it might rain.

Amelia said...

Annie is generally sanguine, however; if you make her angry, she will pout all day.

Kimberly Rotter said...

Samantha,

Good sentence.

Since the cheerleading team won their biggest competition, their coach gave panegyrics and trophies to the athletes for their hard work.

george said...

the ebullient fan yelled an imprecation at the opposing team's player causing the player to drop the ball.

Kimberly Rotter said...

Val,

Good sentences. Need to revise this one for puncuation. See other posts to learn how.

Karen had a sanguine personality, therefore her job as a cashier didn't seem to bring her down as it did the other employees.

Kimberly Rotter said...

Amelia,

You got it backwards. See below.

Correct: Annie is generally sanguine; however, if you make her angry, she will pout all day.

Brittanee said...

The ebullient girl had a very sanguine personality, making her very easy to get along with.

After the accident Joe felt nebulous, and could not remember what happened.

Jane wrote an elegy to express the sad feelings she had toward her breakup.

In deference to the town the mayor would not allow the carnal store to be built next to the church.


The boys raish attitude put in him many quandrys.

Unknown said...

Karen had a sanguine personality, therefore,vali her job as a cashier didn't seem to bring her down as it did the other employees.

Amelia said...

Annie is generally sanguine; however, if you make her angry, she will pout all day.

george said...

when the boy came out of the shoe store with six different pairs of shoes , we knew the boy was a fop.

Grace said...

1) It was know that Jake tended to have a very quick temper, however, around his great grandfather, he was the most patient, sanguine person you could imagine.

Kimberly Rotter said...

Brittanee,
Need to fix puncuation in following sentences. See other posts for help.


The ebullient girl had a very sanguine personality, making her very easy to get along with.

After the accident Joe felt nebulous, and could not remember what happened.

Grace said...

2) Kirk wore his label of "fop" proudly since some of the most important people in his life wore that brand too.

george said...

all the bowdlerizing of the provocative play caused all the lines to become non sequiturs.

Unknown said...

2. John was in a quandary about majoring in spanish; even though his mother really wanted John to major in that subject, she still supported him by showing a lot of deference to him with his unsure decisions and not judging the choices he made.

Kimberly Rotter said...

Val,
See correction:

Karen had a sanguine personality; therefore, vali?? her job as a cashier didn't seem to bring her down as it did the other employees.

Rebecca Ruoff said...

Molly had such a sanguine personality therefore everyone always wanted to sit with her at lunch when they were having a down day.

Maria said...

The English teacher did not agree with the board’s choice to bowdlerize the book her class was going to read because she thought it impaired the importance of the work.

Mark, a local hero, was presented with an award while the crowd cheered with panegyric when the mayor recounted how he solved the quandary.

I felt nebulous of the story’s meaning because I felt the ending was very ambiguous.

In deference to my uncle, I read an elegy at his funeral to remember the good times we shared.

Emily felt sanguine when she received an A on her history test.

Kevin said...

1. After the man lost the love of his life therefore he became very rakish

2. Tom was always being pedantic now that he was the first one to graduate from college.

3. After the boy came home from the war it seemed that everyone had a deference for him.

4. After the poet's mother died he became depressed and wrote a elegy for her

5. You could hear the ebullient crowd whenever the team scored a touchdown

Kimberly Rotter said...

George,

Watch capitalization! Fix:

when the boy came out of the shoe store with six different pairs of shoes , we knew the boy was a fop.

Kimberly Rotter said...

Grace,

Need to fix puncuation in following sentences. See other posts for help.

It was knowN that Jake tended to have a very quick temper, however, around his great grandfather, he was the most patient, sanguine person you could imagine.

Becca Rosetti said...

1. The girl that sat in the front of the class was known as a fop because she always looked her best; however, at home she always relaxed in sweat pants with no makeup on.

2. Although she claimed she was done with the guy, every time he came back and claimed he missed her it impaired her built resistance to run back with him.

3. Even though all her friends had boyfriends, the lonely girl claimed she had an imprecation with that sort of luck.

4. Regardless of the depth of thought and completely valid life lessons contained in the wonderfully written novel, the school’s edition of the book had bowdlerized passages that were claimed to be too inappropriate.

5. Because the foreign boy was new to country’s traditions, he was not aware that in deference of the flag all the American class’ stand and recite the pledge every morning.

Grace said...

3)Patricks so called logic was non sequitur, therefore, I could not take him seriosuly.

Kimberly Rotter said...

Ruoff,

Need to fix puncuation in following sentences. See other posts for help.

Molly had such a sanguine personality therefore everyone always wanted to sit with her at lunch when they were having a down day.

Brittanee said...

After the accident, Joe felt nebulous, and could not remember what happened.

Rebecca Ruoff said...

Although Clair was typically excellent at solving math problems, she was in a quandary about last nights homework even after working for an hour the few problems there were.

Grace said...

It was known that Jake tended to have a very quick temper, however around his great grandfather he was the most patient, sanguine person you could imagine.

Kimberly Rotter said...

Kevin,

Must edit for puncuation. Edit to make sentnces clearer. See other posts for help.

1. After the man lost the love of his life therefore he became very rakish


3. After the boy came home from the war it seemed that everyone had a deference for him.

4. After the poet's mother died he became depressed and wrote a elegy for her

Unknown said...

3. In order to keep their job, editors of children's novels must bowdlerize elegies before they are published.

george said...

when the uncle was giving his elegy for his deceased family member, he used pedantic language so everyone would remember his harvard degree.

Kimberly Rotter said...

Rosetti,
Good sentences. Need to fix this one to make clearer.

2. Although she claimed she was done with the guy, every time he came back and claimed he missed her it impaired her built resistance to run back with him.

Rebecca Ruoff said...

Rewritten: Molly had such a sanguine personality; therefore, everyone always wanted to sit with her at lunch when they were having a down day.

Grace said...

4) It makes me absolutely furious when people think they have the right to bowdlerize pieces of writing and works of art but there is nothing I can do about it.

Unknown said...

Karen had a sanguine personality; therefore, her job as a cashier didn't seem to bring her down as it did the other employees.

Kimberly Rotter said...

Grace,
See corrections below:
It was known that Jake tended to have a very quick temper; however, around his great grandfather he was the most patient, sanguine person you could imagine.

Unknown said...

4. After Amy's pedantic behavior increased, her friends didn't want to be around her anymore since it was rude and unnecessary.

Unknown said...

Rebecca spent all day in the sun without sunglasses therefore her vision was impaired.

Because the crowd was ebullient about the performance, he came back on stage for an encore.

Meghan was a fop, therefore she always made sure he outfit always matched perfectly.

Cara thought there was an imprecation on her, however when she passed the test she didn't believe it.

Because Cheryl was in a quandary she was uncertain about what classes she should take next year.

Kimberly Rotter said...

Ruoof,

Good sentences.

Although Clair was typically excellent at solving math problems, she was in a quandary about last nights homework even after working for an hour the few problems there were.

Rebecca Ruoff said...

3. Rose is always an ebullient person, however since her grandmother died she has been a bit sluggish and anti-social.

Grace said...

5) Alice's adittude was always ebullient, yet Lee always felt he could sense a hidden sadness in her demeanor.

Becca Rosetti said...

Although broken hearted girl had claimed she was finally over him, whenever he came back and claimed he missed her, it impaired her built-up resistance to be with him again.

Kimberly Rotter said...

Julia,

Must edit for puncuation. See other posts for help.

Rebecca spent all day in the sun without sunglasses therefore her vision was impaired.


Meghan was a fop, therefore she always made sure he outfit always matched perfectly.

Cara thought there was an imprecation on her, however when she passed the test she didn't believe it.

Because Cheryl was in a quandary she was uncertain about what classes she should take next year.

Unknown said...

Even though he did not have that much money, the fop was constantly sanguine while shoppping, forgetting about his other expenses, therefore when it came to paying the bills he was always in a quandary.

Although John was usually a ebullient man, his rakish attitude was impaired after being rejected by a girl infront of all of his friends.


Jen had a nebulous memory of an imprecation that she had heard of a long time ago, beginning to believe that it might be happening to her.

Ally gave many panegyrics to her daughter for her grades, even though they were only average.

After hearing the elegy at the funeral, the Jess had much more deference for her grandfather, knowing how great he was before he was sick and miserable.

Unknown said...

1.The asian fop was very particular about what he wore, therefore he went to the mall every weekend to buy new clothes.

2.The bike was impaired when it was left in the driveway and the car ran over it, but Susie knew she could fix it, so she took it into her garage and worked on it.

3. The quandary of whether a student should be allowed to wear a hoodie to school caused many teachers to construct a meeting, however they made no rule change.

4. The elegy a student wrote was admired and published, although it caused much controversy because of its deep meaning.

5. The rakish child danced through the park, whereas the sanguine teacher sat on the bench and read a book.

Kevin said...

1. After the man's wife died, he became very rakish

3. When the soilder came back to the states he was awarded the purple heart, and now his home town had an exterme amount of deference for him

george said...

The drunken man's thopughts were so nebulous ,when he responded to the police officer he said he only had two beers but in reality he had eight.

Iago said...

1.Ashley did not like her mothers boyfriend, but she tried to remain sanquine when he came around the house to keep her mother happy.

2.It was two weeks before her senior prom and Ally was very excited, however, she got caught in a quandary when her rakish date told her he had no money to buy the tickets.

3. My mother wrote an elegy for my grandfathers funeral even though she knew she would have trouble reading it infront of the whole church.

4.The ebullient crowd at the Phillies game pumped up the team during the 1st inning; however, when the opposing team hit three home runs the crowd quickly lost hope.

5.I was finally sitting in my seat ready to see the movie I have been waiting 2 weeks for; but I soon came to the realization that a rude man lacking deference was sitting behind me.

Unknown said...

5. It was quite obvious that the man was a fop; he looked rakish everyday, he even came into work wearing his favorite, most expensive suits.

Kimberly Rotter said...

Ruoff,

Need to edit for puncuation. See other posts for help.

Rose is always an ebullient person, however since her grandmother died she has been a bit sluggish and anti-social.

Zack said...

1. I have very rakish parents, therefore I was left alone in the doctor's office, While I was alone the doctor asked me "Who is your dady and what does he do?"

2. The ebuilliant doctor came back with my test reasults he was inclined to say "It's not a tumor."

3. The sanguine child came in on christmas day and took a cookie. However the grumpy father came running in and screamed "Put the cookie down!"

4."It's Turbo Time." said Turbo man. Yet Dementor still tried to impair him as it did not work when he was defeated by Turboman

5. When a man came to my car wind ow and said,"I'm detective John Kimble." I was in a quandary because he came out of nowhere.

Kimberly Rotter said...

Brooke,

Good involved sentences. Need some edits in puncuation. See other posts and weblinks for help.

Even though he did not have that much money, the fop was constantly sanguine while shoppping, forgetting about his other expenses, therefore when it came to paying the bills he was always in a quandary.

Jen had a nebulous memory of an imprecation that she had heard of a long time ago, beginning to believe that it might be happening to her.(This needs more work to make better sense)

Ally gave many panegyrics to her daughter for her grades, even though they were only average. (edit)

After hearing the elegy at the funeral, the Jess had much more deference for her grandfather, knowing how great he was before he was sick and miserable. (edit)

Kimberly Rotter said...

Cara,
Good involved sentences. Need some edits in puncuation. See other posts and weblinks for help.

1.The asian fop was very particular about what he wore, therefore he went to the mall every weekend to buy new clothes.


3. The quandary of whether a student should be allowed to wear a hoodie to school caused many teachers to CONDUCT a meeting, however they made no rule change.

4. Although it caused much controversy because of its deep meaning, the elegy a student wrote was admired and published. (DETaILS SHOULD ALWAYS BE NEAR THE THING IT IS DESCRIBING)

Kimberly Rotter said...

Kevin,
Good sentences, but don't forget your periods!

1. After the man's wife died, he became very rakish

Kimberly Rotter said...

George,


Good idea. Edit to make sentence clearer.

The drunken man's thopughts were so nebulous ,when he responded to the police officer he said he only had two beers but in reality he had eight.

Anonymous said...

4. The soccer team had a plan to impair their enemy, even though they were the leading team.

5. The child was so nebulous when she got hit in the head with the ball, yet she did not have a concusion.

Unknown said...

1. Dan had always been a fop, although he never acknowledged it until high school when he realized all his friends were predominantly female, who constantly asked him for fashion advice.

2. Paul found himself in quite a quandary when he realized he had agreed to take 4 different girls to prom.

3. Talking to Andrew can be a bit of a non sequitur; he jumps around a lot in conversation and his ideas never connect.

4. I had never felt more ebullience than I did when my team won first place in the championships.

5. "You must have impaired vision," I told her, "otherwise you wouldn't have ever gave such an panegyric to the modern art paintings."

Unknown said...

1. My father cares a lot about his appearance; therefore I called him a fop.


4. The suspects nebulous story did not line up thus landing him time in jail.

5. Sadly I broke the mirror; therefore I now have an imprecation for 7 years.

Anonymous said...

Although the young mans family was stylish and lackadaisical with their clothing, consequently he was very fop an in with high fashion.

Rebecca Ruoff said...

I don't know how to change the punctuation for the sentence:
Rose is always an ebullient person, however since her grandmother died she has been a bit sluggish and anti-social.

Rebecca Ruoff said...

4. The teenage boys had no deference for the elderly woman who was speaking at their school, therefore they were sent out of the room.

Iago said...

1. Ashley tried to remain sanguine when her mothers boyfriend came to the house even though she really hated the way he talked about her father.

2.It was two days before her senior prom and Ally was very excited until her rakish date told her that he didn't buy the tickets yet and he also didn't have any money.

3. My mother wrote an elegy for my grandfathers funeral even though she knew she would have trouble reading it infront of the whole church.

4.Everyone at the Phillies game was very ebullient in order to pump up the team in the first inning; however once the other team hit three home runs the crowd quickly lost hope.

5.The witch wanted to put an imprecation on the princess because the witch was jealous that the princess lived in a big castle and got whatever presents she wanted, while the witch got nothing but a new broom

Anonymous said...

Even though the show became quite racy, the ediotrs refused to bowdlerize the epidodes, in fear of losing their high ratings.

Unknown said...

Jen had a nebulous memory of an imprecation that she had heard of a long time ago about breaking mirrors, so now she was beginning to believe it would come true after se broke her friends mirror.

Ally gave many panegyrics to her daughter for her grades, even though they were only average so there was no reason to be excited.

After hearing the elegy at the funeral, Jess had much more deference for her grandfather even though she remembered him as bitter and miserable.

Anonymous said...

The ebullient crowd went crazy after the Phillies hit a home run to win the game.

Kimberly Rotter said...

Ginny,

Excellent sentences. But think about order of details in sentence so you present it in best logical order. Put details ner the object they modify also. See below.

1. Although he never acknowledged it until high school when he realized all his friends were predominantly female,Dan had always been a fop who constantly asked him for fashion advice.

Kimberly Rotter said...

Ryan,

See comma usage below (after subordinating conjunctions).

1. My father cares a lot about his appearance; therefore, I called him a fop.



5. Sadly I broke the mirror; therefore, I now have an imprecation for 7 years.

Kimberly Rotter said...

Ian,

See revisions.

Because the young man's family was stylish and lackadaisical with their clothing, he was very fop an in with high fashion.

Kimberly Rotter said...

Ruoff,

A semicolon must come before and a comma after a subordinating conjunctions that is connecting 2 sentences.

Rose is always an ebullient person; however, since her grandmother died, she has been a bit sluggish and anti-social.

The teenage boys had no deference for the elderly woman who was speaking at their school; therefore, they were sent out of the room.

Kimberly Rotter said...

Briana,

See revisions below.

3. My mother wrote an elegy for my grandfather's funeral even though she knew she would have trouble reading it infront of the whole church.

4.Everyone at the Phillies game was very ebullient in order to pump up the team in the first inning; however, once the other team hit three home runs, the crowd quickly lost hope.

Kimberly Rotter said...

Brooke,

Jen had a nebulous memory of an imprecation that she had heard of a long time ago about breaking mirrors, so now she was beginning to believe it would come true after se broke her friend's mirror.

Even though her daughter's grades were only average so there was no reason to be excited, Ally still gave many panegyrics to her daughter for her grades.